Friday Fictioneers is on Facebook hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. You can read other stories or join to write your own at https://rochellewisoff.com/. A complete story in 100 words in response to a photo prompt. My second attempt…
photo prompt by J Hardy Carroll
The warehouse
She skips past the old warehouse, all boarded up now. It is a tale of terrific failure – that’s what her dad said and she can see: nothing happens here. He was only repeating well-oiled rumour. Limp metal, a jamb in slow-motion fall. She passes every day, feels the shadow of the blackened chimney, the creep of rot. The days pass and she skips more slowly, sees more slowly: sees the stripes of rust and the makeshift armour of corrugation, notices how the glass has survived everything, how it shines.
There’s some lovely use of language here. I really liked the contrast between the decay of the building and the well-oiled rumour
Thank you. I found this one really difficult. Looking forward to reading how others approached it…
Sounds like the girl has quite an observant, poetic soul. She’ll probably be a writer some day. 😉
I do hope so! Thank you
I hope so! Thank you.
Interesting how, as she grows older, she sees the sadness and deterioration more clearly.
Oh dear I must have gone astray. I was hoping that by the end…the windows shining, that things were looking a bit better. Wasn’t clear enough. Thank you.
So I went back and read it again when I saw your response to my comment, and I think I was the one who missed it 🙂 The shining windows do make a difference, but I was so caught up in the deterioration that I missed it.
Hi there, thank you. ps I don’t seem to be able to approve your comments! Maybe a glitch on my site but other approvals ok…have you had any other problems with this lately
No, Rachel. No problems here. Sorry you’re having trouble.
These are my favorite sections:
“She passes every day, feels the shadow of the blackened chimney, the creep of rot.”
“… notices how the glass has survived everything, how it shines.”
Hi Marley, thank you for reading!